My mamma caught me eating soil yesterday,
She wouldn’t have caught me, if
I hadn’t stolen the sieve
From the kitchen,
To separate the rocks from the soil.
I should have let those rocks
Poke my oesophagus.
She patted thrice on my back
And took me in,
Seated me next to the kitchen door
Went in to get a glass of water.
She asked me to drink at least half of it
And wiped the dirt off my face.
She asked me, why I was eating dirt?
I said, you told me that
I was made of soil and
I’ll return to soil one day.
So I was trying, to fasten the process.
Which process? She asked.
I said there was two and
I’m happy with either one.
First is that,
I think when I was made, someone left holes in me
And I wanted the soil to fill me up.
For things ache in me and
I want to feel whole .
And second is that,
If I eat too much soil then
I’ll have more than enough of it in me that,
Earth would want me to return to it soon
And I’ll finally be free.
Mamma then held me close to her chest and said
Baby things don’t work like that,
If they did,
Then I would have sat along with you
And ate soil.
My dear baby things don’t work like that.
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Β© 14/04/19 The Rendezvous Club
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Clearly that puts you in a very healthy space ππ
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This is brilliantly penned!
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Your hand is casting a spell.
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Nice poem
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Wow – nice meter to the voice – and love the deeper meaning here
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this was a really “fresh and original” read and it stayed with me all day (just want ed to share that)
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This is awesome β€
keep up the good work.
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Adhi you are too good in expressing your thoughts… Again and again how do I say remarkable….but your words force me to… Excellent rendition girlie…
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How deep and thought provoking.
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I still remember eating soil in my childhood and getting spanked… lovely poetry…
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Embraces my heart with a ribbon of emotionsπ¦
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Impressive work β€ Loved this.
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You are a beautiful soul …..you ought to be …..to pour out so much beautyπ€β€οΈ
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Brilliant indeed!
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Love this poem..it’s very beautiful dear Aditya π€β€οΈ
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bag in hand
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This is outstanding………I could feel the girls pain and the mother’s love in your words. Bravo.
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truly my pleasure!
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Innocent of babyππ and caring mother.. wow… I was just imagining the scene.. looks classic.. π
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Congrats adithya for the 2000 subs!!!
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OH MY GOD THIS WAS FLABBERGASTING AND ACHINGLY EXQUISITE!
I felt it, this pierced in, through my heart and bones. Oh I wish things wold work like that.
You are amazing!
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Damn beautiful β€οΈ- you define pain so well
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Amazing postπβ€οΈπ
(btw my sis even eats chalkπ)
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This poem is not just simple but reflective of a deeper human emotion which is often ignored. I love the subtle presentation with the depth of an ocean. This one is a masterpiece.
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Wonderful story! Looking at simple moments in life make for fabulous poetry.
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This poem is perfect. This first half sets up the story – the second half is so touching. Well done
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This is brilliantly written! Absolutely beautiful!!
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My heart broke at so many words while reading this.So much pain in so few words.
The reasons for eating the mud πππ
The girl is in pain and so has been the mom.
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I am happy that I could write this piece which made you emotional. π€
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Profound and beautiful!! Loved it!! It was intense and deep! β€οΈπΈ
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This is such a beautiful write! Loved it!
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Its awesome…
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Hi!!! u r good. Indian?
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Yes i am an Indian
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i m assuming by ur face that u r quite young to write so well. Anyways,, i have just started writing.
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Yes I just checked out your blog.
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hope i m good. Though very raw at the moment..
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Yes a little raw but with time you have the potential to be great
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Beautiful Adithya.
My loss for not been in touch
And the coffee is still waiting
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